Blog EntryThe Chronicles of Jack Ornette - Chapter 2Jul 18, '06 5:22 AM
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Chapter 2

 

            Meanwhile, in a forest, on the outskirts of Jeff and Jack’s rented apartment in Sallance, was a man running deep into the forest.  A skinny old farmer, who was running away from an insanely fast shadowy figure with glowing yellow, dimmed eyes.  He didn’t have much stamina, and he couldn’t get far.  Along the way, he avoided exposed roots so he wouldn’t fall.  As he ran, he huffed and puffed, feeling a little bit dizzy due to the running.  But finally, he made it through.  He turned his head back to catch a short glimpse, and he saw nothing.

            He stopped, he rested both of his hands on his knees as support to try and relax, catching his breath and he thought, “What the hell was that..?  Wiping his sweat off his forehead, still trying to figure out what was that figure who was chasing after him.  By the speed, he can tell that this thing is inhuman.  After a couple of deep breaths, he was able to stand up normally again, and he looked around his surroundings – trees.

            The farmer could not see anything else but trees and the soiled ground.  The soil turned into mud due to the heavy rain.  The farmer looked ahead and saw a bridge.  Through his eyesight, he could see a round ball of darkness, getting larger and larger.  Not realizing that it was headed the farmer’s way.  He looked again and exclaimed, “What the..?!”

            He turned around, and ran towards the direction he was earlier running from, but he was blasted by the speed impact of the ball of darkness, trapping the farmer in a realm surrounded by darkness.  Helplessly, he looked around for a way out, then shouted, “Who are you?!  What do you want from me?!”

            A shadowy figure with long silver hair slowly descended from above, the farmer saw him and started trembling in fear.  He had pale skin, light blue eyes and a sharp chin.  He had rugged black slacks, and a long black cape that flapped along with the wind as he descended.  He stared at the farmer with his eyes, and blinked.

            The farmer shouted in pain, as daggers appeared in front of the man with silver hair and dashed towards the farmer – piercing both of his palms and feet and spreading them wide, nailing him towards the floor.  The farmer struggled as much as he could, but nothing could get the daggers to budge one inch.

            Both of the man’s feet touched the ground, with a deep echoic voice, “I want information.  If you co-operate, you shall not feel pain.  But, if you refuse..”

            The caped man smiled.  By doing so, it instilled fear into the farmer.  The smile only had one meaning – death.

The caped man, slowly walked towards the pinned farmer and asked, “Tell me.  Where is he?”

            “Where’s who?!”

            Letting off a short sinister laugh, he smiled again, and the daggers went in deeper into the soil until there’s an inch left of the blade that can be seen, which caused the farmer to cry in pain, “I don’t who you’re talking about!!  Argh!  Please, stop!  I have no clue who you’re looking for!!”

            “… I have always disliked the fancy wordplay by humans.”

            The farmer, still crying in unbearable pain, “No!  I seriously do not know!”

            Last chance!” shouted the caped man, drawing his 5 feet blade, pointing it to the farmer.

            I don’t know!  Oh God, help me now!” said the farmer, begging for mercy.

            The caped man grunted and drew his sword behind his shoulders and said, “Liar!  I’ve been told he lurks around this town, Sallance!  And I only believe, you’re telling a lie after all this while.”

            “Seriously!  I do not kn..”

            Without hesitation, he plunged his sword into the middle of his chest and the farmer shouted in pain, for the final time.

            The caped man grunted and kept his blade.  The daggers disappeared, and the darkness slowly faded, revealing the forest they were in.  The caped man cracked his neck, looked around his surroundings, opened his arms and recited:

 

The night is young, the skies are grey,

The man I’m looking for, stands in my way.

I will walk this path, and death shall be scattered,

Until the path is cleared, he will be discovered.

 

            After doing so, a dark aura surrounded him, and his feet weren’t touching the wet grounds anymore.  He drifted along the path; which led to Sallance.


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brokenwingz wrote on Jul 18, '06
the 1st part was like real life scene now this sound like fantasy story...hahahaahhaahahahaa
glacius wrote on Jul 18, '06
Wooo...ahahaha.. it's a mixture of both, you see. Wanted to make things normal, but seriously, if you follow reality.. Your creativity can't really flow..

And if you want a bad guy.. You must make sure he's a bad-ass dude.. muahahahahahahha..
peachybutt wrote on Jul 18, '06
i read later okieeee...
glacius wrote on Jul 18, '06
It's up to you ba.. lol
schizzow wrote on Jul 18, '06
Actually. I don't like fantasy stories.(excpet Potttering) I loved the first chapter to bits. But this second one not really la. ALthough you had more narrations :D:D:D

And the murderer somehow had me linking him to Voldemont. Or Lucius Malfoy (because of the silver hair) LOL


So fast wan yoU XD
glacius wrote on Jul 18, '06
Guahahaha... it's a tie between fiction and reality ba. Depends. You can rather say I got influenced by Kingdom Hearts T.T.


Now, there's nothing much to introduce here, except for the badass badguy here ba. The farmer lasted for a chapter, so it would be stupid if there was another dialogue about how the farmer looked and all XD
glacius wrote on Jul 18, '06
And btw. Love + a lot of narrations = sex story
schizzow wrote on Jul 18, '06
LMFAO
Noes.
schizzow wrote on Jul 18, '06
But really. I love reality stories. More than fiction ones.
brokenwingz wrote on Jul 18, '06
"And the murderer somehow had me linking him to Voldemont. Or Lucius Malfoy (because of the silver hair) LOL"

agreed !!
glacius wrote on Jul 18, '06
Oh well. Now you're making me not to write, Schizzow. Lol. I know how reality stories own; I like it too..but the problem is.. I like dwelling in a fantasized world :)... more place to let loose.. But I'm tryna merge that, as you can see. LoL
glacius wrote on Jul 18, '06
Btw, Lucky you all think it's Voldemort. Isn't it Voldermort or sth? And lucky that you all ain't thinking it's Sephiroth 8-)
wormy wrote on Jul 18, '06
dope also la
but i also feel that chapter 1 chunner leh

this one the top half right, like.. kinda too many short sentences, maybe try not to have so much of 'em. cam tak puas reading it lidat. Read a lil then stop read a lil then stop. thats how i read stories, i have a narrator in my head wan. hmmm
glacius wrote on Jul 18, '06
Oh yeah. I get what you mean, WoRmY. I have tis problem about not stretching the sentences long, ba.. x).. Chapter 1 is sweet.. chapter 2 would be the introduction of this badass asshole. Gah
wormy wrote on Jul 18, '06
chapter 3 introduces what
lol
glacius wrote on Jul 18, '06
Tak tau ba. I think it'll be the sequel for chapter 1. I believe people would like the three nutcases there


btw, if you all realised by now, one of them is a nigga. X).. I love writing nigga lines XD
wormy wrote on Jul 18, '06
lmfao lmfao
i think u shouldn't jump around so much maybe build characters from the first chapter more first, then start building the asswipe.
dunno
up to u
glacius wrote on Jul 18, '06
Hahahaha.. don't worry man.. I know what I'm doing ba. I think? Lol.


It's pretty fun building characters.. I hope that this short project I have would be rather interesting to y'all
wormy wrote on Jul 18, '06
i'm hoping..
lolol

by the end of the story, i'll tell u
"this is a piece of junk crap.. u wasted 10 days of my life"
glacius wrote on Jul 18, '06
LOL. I doub tit'll be 10 days long also XD
wormy wrote on Jul 18, '06
ahaks
ahpeng7288 wrote on Jul 18, '06
glacius said
LOL. I doub tit'll be 10 days long also XD
so u mean it'll be 11days long lar???? lol.......
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