Blog EntryThe Chronicles of Jack Ornette - Chapter 1Jul 18, '06 1:12 AM
for everyone
Firstly, I always enjoyed writing poems. But this time, maybe I want to take it up another level. Writing stories. And I just started today, and I would need comments if I should continue or not so at least I won't be wasting my time on this. Anyways, the title of this story/book would be The Chronicles of Jack Ornette.

Hope you all enjoy it.

I'll have to figure a way out how to link them together one day. Maybe after each chapters, I will leave the links to the previous chapters, ba?



Chapter 1



            It was a stormy night, the house was lit up with lights.  Jack was doing the usual; playing some tunes on his acoustic guitar.  He has always admired the rain and dark clouds; as it gave him some time to relax and think over what he has achieved.
            “Sweetie?”, a faint voice called out.
            Jack turned around and saw Clochette, leaning against the kitchen door, “Are you feeling alright..?”
            “.. Yeah.  I’m good.  It’s just that this headache of mi..”
            Clochette, with her wavy dark brown hair and slim body, walked towards the sofa that Jack was on, and sat on his left.  She took her fingers and ran it through his dark, wavy hair, and said, “Hush now.  I believe that none of us would want to know about that headache of yours, right?”
            Jack was silent.
            Slowly, Clochette lightly touched Jack’s right side of his broad jaw, and slowly turned his face; making them have eye contact.  Both of their dark brown eyes were set upon each other.
            Jack let off a sigh.
            Clochette gave off a half-smile and went slowly kissed him on the lips.  She said, “Remember what you always told me.  We’re always in each other’s hearts no matter what and..”
            “.. Not even distance can be a factor.” Continued Jack.  “I know.  After all, I was the one who said that to you, baby.  And no matter what happens, I’ll always..”
            “.. Be with you.”
            Jack smiled.  Jack put his guitar aside, and held his darling Clochette by the cheeks, and kissed her on the forehead.
            “I love you,” admitted Clochette.
            “I love you too, sweetie.”
 

            Suddenly, a loud voice bombarded the romance from 5 feet away, “Hey!  You two done wit’cha smoochin’ already?  I’m gettin’ hungry.  Why, I’m so hungry, I could even munch down on one of ‘em Bigfoots.  And I mean, one of ‘em BIG Bigfoots!”
            Jack sighed and answered, “Jeff, will you just shut up?  I don’t think you’re that hungry.”
            He marched out with a towel tied around his waist, exposing his dark well-built chest, and said, “Fool!  Didn’t you just hear what just said?”
            “Yeah.  But you didn’t say which part of the damned Bigfoot you say you would eat.  So I’m just assuming you’ll just eat their feet.” Jack answered.
            “Fool!  Don’t you be playin’ one of ‘em mind games on me, man.  High school’s fuckin over!  We in college, man!  Who gives a shit if I said the wrong crap?”
            “Okay, fine.  Have it your way, man.  I’ll just leave you in the forest and you’ll find one of ‘em BIG Bigfoots, by yourself, since you said you wanted to eat them.  Howabout that?”
            “Oh-ho.  Don’t be I’m Mr.-I-have-the-car-and-I-am-king-of-your-balls dude.  Seriously, when are we gonna have some grub?  I’m hungry.”
            Clochette giggled, “As long as the rain isn’t this heavy, ping pong head.  If we go under this condition, we’ll be soaked before we get into the car!”
            “Hey!  Now, you don’t be dissin my head.  Baldness is U-NIQUE.  And it’s pride, you see.  And you wanna try having this ping-pong ball in your blabber mouth, girl?”
            Jack stood up, “Hey man!  Cool down, she didn’t mean it.”
            “Fool!  Ask your main beeee-yatch to shut her pot hole, man.  Seriously, I don’t know why you have to bring her into this apartment lot we’re renting, man!  Whatever.  When you bitches gonna get ready?”
            Jack replied, “Well, if the attire’s going to be a semi-naked guy with a towel, covering his instrument of population and a shit hole that’s bigger than his mouth, I guess I’ll get changed then.”
            A moment silence fell upon them for a few seconds
            “… Dudes, you just wait here.  I’ll go get something to wear.” Jeff said, and turned away from the corridor, heading to his room.
            Clochette stood up, and hugged Jack from the back, “He’s so cute.”
            “Yeah, and a serious pain in the ass at times.  You know, I think that stomach conquers his mind, body and soul.”
            Jeff shouted from his room, “By the way, Jack.  My instrument of population is the best shit in this world!  Why, it’s the best till I can have Clochette screamin’ my name!”
            “.. You know, I take back whatever I said.  His arrogance is like the size of his penis.”
            Clochette giggled, held Jack a little bit tighter around the waist and gave him a peck on his cheeks from the back, “Let him be.  Besides, without him, you wouldn’t have a place to stay.”
            Jack laughed, “Nor will what’s left of my life will be fun living.”
            Clochette frowned a little bit behind Jack's shoulder, held Jack a little bit tighter and laid her head on Jack’s back.


18 CommentsChronological   Reverse   Threaded
wormy wrote on Jul 18, '06
put a tag on it la.. so when ppl click on the tag, they can find all the entries related to the tag. nahmean
ok now i read
wormy wrote on Jul 18, '06
“Fool! Didn’t you just hear what just said?”


missing word
glacius wrote on Jul 18, '06
Gah.

Multiply screwed up my arrangemnts T.T
wormy wrote on Jul 18, '06
“… Dudes, you just wait here. I’ll go something to wear.” another missing word
wormy wrote on Jul 18, '06
“.. You know, I take back whatever I said. He’s arrogance is like the size of his penis.”
His, not he's
wormy wrote on Jul 18, '06
lololol.
haih.
wonder what's gonna happen in chapter 2.
hmm
schizzow wrote on Jul 18, '06
The Day Of The Barney


Lol.

Farkin dope weih. Doesn't sound like you at all. I mean the way you write.
schizzow wrote on Jul 18, '06
You know what would be better? Adding mroe non dialog paragraphs. Cos in this chapter, mostly all are dialogs, conversations.

The story would be more like a story if you added more narrations. :D
glacius wrote on Jul 18, '06
Goddamn . So many mistakes after I twitched the damn codings to fit it right.. looks rather messy.. looks perfect in M.Word.. GAH. I'll reedit now T.T
schizzow wrote on Jul 18, '06
But. Dope shit macha.
glacius wrote on Jul 18, '06
Will take that in mind, schiz. I'll see what I can do in the next chapter x)
wormy wrote on Jul 18, '06

The story would be more like a story if you added more narrations. :D
true pun.
this is just chapter 1, just introducing.
hmm
wormy wrote on Jul 18, '06
The Day Of The Barney
did u finish it ah?
schizzow wrote on Jul 18, '06
Nope T.T
glacius wrote on Jul 18, '06
Oh yeah. Regarding the conversations; of course I didn't put them in naration-style because I wanted this to be more to an introduction than to type out details about their attitude.. I believe it's best understood if you read the way they talk, and their actions, rather than to stress your eyes to read about their background, right? :)


I don't know.. Kinda new in writing, still figuring out characters and plots. :). And the tag.. hmm.. I'll figure that out? I'll try to work on that ba?.. Or put both X)
wormy wrote on Jul 18, '06
Nope T.T
-.-
glacius wrote on Jul 18, '06
I've got a feeling, copy + pasting this whole Jack Ornette story crap would work better in IE instead of Mozilla. More compatible since it's all Microsoft-linked?.. Mozilla works differently to Microsoft works, anyways.. Gah.
peachybutt wrote on Jul 18, '06
wah
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